Friday 1st March, St David’s Day and time for more Friday Fictioneers. Thanks for the photo prompt this week go to Beth Carter, and thanks for continuing to inspire the Friday Fictioneers go to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.
Genre: Literary Fiction
Word Count: 100 words
The Fresh Start
He looked out at the yard.
Not much stuff left now. Some cookery books, the unused ‘zigzag action’ sewing machine, a red boudoir chair, some photo albums, a few shoes. All her castoffs.
He saw the red-haired woman again. She had walked passed a couple of times. Now she crossed the street and stood looking at the car. He had hated women, one woman, for too long.
He came outside, she smiled.
“Seems I’ve moved to an interesting neighbourhood, is the car in the sale too?”
He grinned, it wasn’t a sale, just a clear out.
He got the keys.
(Late entry this week. I tried to post last night, but for some reason I couldn’t load the photo and there’s never an intergeek around when you need one! So this is my Saturday Submission)
Wife or mother? Such a great open-ended piece with two already likeable characters – pretty good for a short piece. Enjoyed it.
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Thanks Sandra, glad you liked it.
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An ending and a possible beginning, a bit of hope. I think he’s ready to move on. Nice.
janet
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Yes, he’s ready to mov eon now I think.
Glad you liked it and thanks for reading
Dee
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Yes, this bit did make me want to hear the rest of the story. My immediate reaction was that he was going to take her for a test drive and murder her!
But that’s just me…
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Thank you!
He’s not going to murder her, thought about it, but then decided it would be a happy piece
Thanks for reading
Dee
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I can’t help wondering what’s on his mind as he got the keys. Doesn’t sound like he has good intentions. 😉
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Dear Rochelle
Perhaps you are still in “dark mode” (ha ha)
I thought about bad intentions, but then decided he would be nice, this time.
Thank youe for reading
Dee
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I guess she was getting up her nerve to meet the neighbors. Seems like his fortunes may have taken an uptick. So, Is he giving her the car or just taking her for a ride?
Did you mean a comma after ‘unused’?
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Ted – his fortunes have changed. She’s new to the area and lonely too, just good things for the two of them this time…
Hadn’t noticed the comma, will take a look and thanks for pointing it out. Thanks also for reading
Cheers
Dee
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Taken the comma out Ted, not sure how it slipped in there
Thanks for pointing it out
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I need to have one of those–a clean out–but for different reasons. Heh.
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Good idea always!
Thanks for reading
Dee
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Very good!
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Thank you, so glad you liked it
Dee
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he may have hated women, but i think he’s got something other than “hate” for this one…well done. i like stories about temptation. and even if that isn’t what you were going for – too late – it’s what i’m taking from it.
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Rich
As usual, you were right on the button, they’re going to have fun
Thanks for reading
Dee
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thanks for writing something fun.
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thank you for reading it
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Very nice. I’m rooting for the guy!
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Thanks, me too 🙂
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I think he felt so good about dumping her stuff he didn’t need to kill her / maybe next time 🙂
thanks for the visit
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Thsnk you for reading. His wife had walked out and left behind everything she didn’t want, he was dumping it to start again.
He was going to kill her, then I changed my mind!
Lovely to hear from you
Dee
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