Thanks to Sandra for this week’s photo, and to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for gathering us all together again this week. On seeing the photo, I was initially struck by a farming theme and as I could write what I know about farming on the back of a postage stamp, I quickly decided against even trying to go any further with it.
Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 100
Hell Raising
Occasionally tourists would stop at the end of the drive, snapping away.
Nicholas didn’t mind. Sometimes if the mood took him, he would get off the porch, wander down the drive and pass the time of day.
“Howdy.”
“Hello, nice to meet you. We’re on holiday from England, mind if we take a few photos?”
“Nope, you go right ahead.”
“We were wondering what on earth it is, that strange thing on your patio.”
“It’s just my trike.”
“You mean you actually ride it?”
Nicholas turned away, eyes blazing red. Should he show them, or would that spoil their holiday?
The clue is in the ‘eyes blazing red’ – right? Be afraid, be very afraid. 🙂
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Yes, right.
Thanks for reading 🙂
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Hehehe. Love it 😀
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Thank you. Glad you liked it 🙂
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Definitely not St. Nick!! Unique and enjoyable look at the prompt, Dee.
janet
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On no, not St Nick!
Thanks Janet
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Ominous stuff here, Dee. I feel like that’s no ordinary trike. Your main character’s surname isn’t Cage is it?!
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Glad you liked it
Had to look up the Cage connection 🙂
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Did you find it? http://www.imdb.com/title/tt1071875/ might explain!
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Yes found it, explains a lot 🙂
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A wild way to end it, with Nicholas’s red eyes and a take on the tourist’s holy-day. I get the feeling that Nicholas, even though he was polite at first, is about to get in some hell raising.
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Yes that’s the plan
Thanks for reading
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Oooh! Me thinks there is more to this than meets the eye 🙂
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Thanks for reading Lynn 🙂
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oooohhhh, nice and scary, sneaks up on one. Well done. I enjoyed reading, your words just flowed for me.
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Hi Penny
Glad you enjoyed this one, nice to try and write something a bit different
Dee
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Yes, I think it would…!
Sinister and scary… 😉
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Thank you for reading 🙂
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Loved the twist well done!
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Thank you for reading 🙂
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Aww the end was so cute, wondering if to show them or not..so many things we fear in life would disappoint others if they knew the truth or the extent of the truth. Wonderful piece.
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Thank you very much for your kind comments, glad you liked it
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Aw, go ahead, Nicholas, spoil their holiday. Entertaining piece, Dee. I enjoyed it and want to know more.
shalom,
Rochelle
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A bit of difficulty in deciding where to go this week, glad you like it. Thanks for reading
Dee
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Love it! Nothing like making the tourists feel at home!
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Yay! Thank you elephant 🙂
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Nice ending! There’s so much left to the imagination!
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That’s the wonder of imagination, we can all have different endings.
Thank you for reading
Dee
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Well written Dee, I loved the dark side of Nick that just peeked through at the end. Pesky English tourists! 🙂
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Thank you so much.:)
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It would give them a tale to tell, if they ever made it back home.
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Don’t think they’re going to…
Thanks for reading David
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Scary stuff – I think those tourists should give him a wide berth! Is he the devil?
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Yes he is and I think it’s too late for the tourists!
Thanks for reading 🙂
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I can guess this isn’t Saint Nicholas! I think i would take the photos and move along before his show and tell session began.
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Hi Joe
Think they are too late, his ride is about to begin!
Thanks for reading
Dee
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Oh my scared of Nicholas. A real ominous feel in this story. Nicely done.
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Thank you for reading, glad you like it 🙂
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Might this be Mr. Cage? I enjoyed. Thank you for sharing.
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Hadn’t realised the Cage connection until Jen (elmowrites) mentioned it. Not heard of the film. (sorry Mr Cage)
Glad you liked it JK and thanks for reading
Dee
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How quickly Nicholas loses his temper (blazing red eyes and all)! He is definitely not an ordinary trike rider:) an interesting story
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Yes on a very short fuse (no pun intended)
Thanks for reading
Dee
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Uh-0h…me thinks they are going to get a huge surprise when they return home and take a peek at the photos they took on that visit. That is, IF they manage to return home. Loved the red-eyed mystery … a thrilling thriller. Tks for visiting me.
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Don’t think they are going to make it Lora
Thanks for reading
🙂
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haha i think that’d make their holiday extra interesting! ^^ great story.
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Certainly would!
Thanks for reading
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Lol..show ‘em!
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Oh dear, I can tell from the comments that those poor folk are doomed–good story.
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They certainly are!
Thank you for reading
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