An early prompt this week, thought I was still caught up in jet-lag-holiday-mode.
Once again, Queen Rochelle gathers her workers about her with a new prompt, this week the photograph is courtesy of John Nixon. I love the wizened looking trees and twisted roots, and guess the photo will provide the usual brilliantly inventive stories from the other Friday Fictioneers. You can read mine below the photograph.
Copyright John Nixon
Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 100
The Games Children Play
‘You abducted him, admit it’
‘No!’
‘You say you know where he is’
‘Sort of’
‘So you took him?’
The world slows, the mist comes. I see a blindfolded child standing in front of a tree; five older boys are running away.
‘I can see him, in a wood’
‘You can see him in a wood, what sort of crap is that?’
‘I came here to help. I see things. I didn’t take him, but I can see him’
‘You see things? Then I guess you know what’s coming! Lock him up Ben’
I see the bough break.
And fall.
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Whoa! The games kids play, all right! I had that feeling of those old films where the children do creepy things. Good story, Dee!
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Thanks Kent. I was a little out of my comfort zone writing this slightly creepy tale, but if you liked it, then I’m happy.
Dee
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Good job on creepy, Dee. I think we’re all in a bit of time warp this week due to the early posting of the prompt. I felt as if it were Wednesday all day yesterday. Really.
janet
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Thanks Janet. Yes I think Rochelle did a great job of confusing all of us this week.
Dee
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I do my best. I even confused myself. 😉
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amazing turn of event at the end ! 🙂
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Thank you, and thanks for reading.
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Sometimes it’s good to be out of your comfort zone. Very disturbing tale but very well done.
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Yes I agree. I do try to do more, but sometimes I just don’t feel comfortable, perhaps that’s how it should be.
Glad this one worked and happy that you liked it.
Dee
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*shivers* that was very disturbing. i like the way you ended it.. with the bough breaking and falling. well done! 🙂
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Thank you kz glad you liked it.
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Wow! Very good —I think it would be horrible to be a psychic!
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Yes I agree with you, don’t know how you would live with it. Thanks for reading Linda, good to hear from you .
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What a creeepy end.. the breaking bow.. really enjoyed your childrens tale gone bad.
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Thanks Bjorn, much appreciated.
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I never saw that coming 🙂 good story, Dee.
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Thanks Russell, glad you liked it 🙂
Dee
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If this was a stretch out of your comfort zone I feel it is only a warm up. I want to know what happens “When the bough breaks”.
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Thank you very much Dawn.
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Oh, nice work. I like your interpretation of the prompt.
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Thank you so much
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Eerie story! Nice job in telling a creepy tale, kz must be rubbing off on you!
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Thanks Perry. Don’t tell her, she is the mistress of dark and creepy!
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A creepy tale. That’s what you get for trying to be helpful!
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Thank you. Sometimes bring helpful doesn’t always go the way you’d planned do you think?
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Loved the ending! Though this could well be happening which is very disturbing.
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Thank you for reading. It is a genre I’m not too comfortable with, but enjoyed writing this.
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Nicely done this tale of psychic powers and a disturbing end.
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Thank you, glad you liked it.
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I loved the pace of this story, as the tension and suspense built up inch-by-inch. It’s one of hose stories that just sticks with you. Great work!
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Thank you for such a lovely comment, I’m pleased that you liked it. Thanks for reading.
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Clear plot here, I liked the build up and it reminded me of an episode of midsomer murders where the children did an initiation and the boy getting initiated was hung to death accidentally…the games indeed. Very nice take on the prompt Dee 🙂
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Good to hear from you Camgal…
I’m pleased you liked the story, thanks for reading.
Dee
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A story which evokes what happens all too often nowadays…with an ending that evokes a child-like twist connecting it beautifully to the photo prompt. Great job…
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Thank you, I’m pleased that you liked the story. A little out of my comfort zone, but enjoyed the challenge.
Dee
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Yikes!Sometimes kids are more cruel than adults!Sad that those interrogating the psychic made her the scapegoat .Had they listened ,a child may have been saved-ooh!Loved the dark place you took us this week Dee,great job:-)
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Thank you so much. Out of my comfort zone this week, but rather enjoyed writing it.
Dee
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So,double kudos to you for having written so well,even if it was out of your comfort zone,Dee 🙂
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Thank you. I really appreciate that 🙂
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:-)A pleasure
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Great story, my heart goes out to your main character
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Thanks Siobhan
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Dear Dee,
Have you ever read The Lord of the Flies? This certainly put me in mind of it. There’s something chilling about this level of cruelty in children that hits the top of the eeriness chart. Well done.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
No, I have never read The Lord of the Flies. I’m not a horror fan – this story was out of my comfort zone but the photo seemed quite creepy to me and the story almost wrote itself.
Thank you for your kind comments, as always they are much appreciated.
Take care
Dee
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Glad to see you, ahem… Branching out, turning over a new leaf, uprooting. This was quite different for you, and I loved it.
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Oh very good… glad you liked it Helena, it was very different for me, but I enjoyed writing it.
Perhaps I’ll find a bit more of my dark side…
Dee
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Great story Dee! I really enjoyed your tale. Hope someone saves the kid but they are too busy trying to solve the case instead of finding the kid alive. Also, I have 4 boys that we all watched “Lord of the Flies” and it was pretty disturbing to me at the time, but thank God the boys didn’t do that stuff to each other. Well, there was this one time . . . . Very good writing! Nan 🙂
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Thank you Nan. We have 3 boys and although I never watched ‘Lord of the Flies’ the eldest one read it and we talked about it – scared the live out of me. We worry about our kids and hope nothing happens to them. Yet it seems sometimes some of them are capable of committing dreadful things . I still haven’t got over the Bulger case here in the UK.
Anyway, my thanks as usual for reading, hope you have a lovely day.
Dee
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OOH. That’s a story I’d like to see more of. Great read. Lucy
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