Thanks to Georgia Koch for the lovely photo for our prompt this week and to our intrepid Captain Rochelle for navigating our good ship Friday Fictioneers through all kinds of seas.
Copyright – Georgia Koch
Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 100
Weathering Our Storm
Will you come with me, to Venice?’
An invitation to the place where we began would once have sent my heart soaring. Dare I allow it to do so again?
‘I’ll think about it, if that’s alright?’
Oh, the care we take with one another. I couldn’t ride out the maelstrom of his affair. I had to scream it out, to hit back verbally against the waves of pain and sadness that engulfed and threatened to overpower me.
But somehow the storm abated, he chose to stay. How ambitious we are, how determined to keep our precious ship afloat.
‘Yes.’
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This was a poignant read. You captured the sense of betrayal and wariness of trusting again, perfectly!
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Thank you Kirsten. Your comment is much appreciated. Dee
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Dear Dee,
I loved your story and the way you wove nautical tendrils through its fabric. Can’t help but think that their vessel has shipworms deep inside its beams. Very well done.
Aloha,
Doug
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Dear Doug
You are probably right, but they think they have to try, rather than just walk away. I always appreciate your thoughtful comments, they mean a lot.
Take care
Dee
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Dear Dee,
You wrote a beautiful story. I wonder, as I read, if their ship will stay afloat.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
I wonder too, perhaps trying to stay afloat takes more courage than just abandoning ship, but I think it may be too late.
Thank you for your comments, they are always appreciated.
Take care
Dee
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As Doug said you did a great job of weaving in nautical terms to make this story float lightly across the page. Well done.
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I worried I had used too many, but they fitted the mood i was trying to create, so I posted with fingers crossed!
Thanks for reading. 😊
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Dear Dee, He’s a Dirty Rotten Scoundrel! Excellent and have fun I hope at his expense! Nan 🙂
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Dear Nan,
She is not sure about him but is willing to try, Thanks for reading
Dee 😀
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Ugh, I have been through this more than once. I remember I used to get mad at people who would say “He’ll just do it again”, But now I want to scream at your character “He’ll just do it again”!
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Hi Dawn – so sorry to hear this was a bit too close to home for you. Given most people’s experience of this situation I would say your observations are spot on.
Thanks for reading.
Dee
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I’m glad she’s giving it another go. I think after such a rift there has to be a new beginning, and maybe returning to the place associated with their first love is a mistake. You portray her feelings very well.
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I thank you for such a thoughtful comment. I’m not sure if they will make it, but they have to try.
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A beautiful story, and very fitting for the prompt. I hope their ship stays afloat.
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Thank you Sandra, always appreciate your comments.
Dee
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Dear Dee,
So many metaphors in our language speak of the sea. You’ve found and followed an apt set of these in your story this week. Nicely handled.
Marie Gail
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Thank you Marie Gail, much appreciated 😊
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Somehow we are all travelling that ship.. and even though we don’t all travel through stormy seas the way still struggle to keep the boat afloat sometimes.
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Very true Bjorn, always good to hear from you 🙂
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Good story, Dee. I hope they make it. Great use of metaphor. At least they’re trying to make things work. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thank you Suzanne 😊
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Dee, a tender story full of passion. I could feel her rage and bitterness, but for the sake of the ship, she will endure. I hope he can change his ways. Great use of metaphor and well done.
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Thank you Amy, I appreciate your thoughtful comment 🙂
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