I’m late, I’m late… thanks Rochelle for keeping us on the straight and narrow and to Dawn for a lovely photo from her trek to Machu Picchu – it’s on my list…
Copyright Dawn Q. Landau
Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 100
Making Tracks
The juiciest blackberries grew alongside the tracks; with a sick husband and five children to feed, Anna happily accepted nature’s help. Becky snatched the pail from her mother, furious the others were never sent picking.
At lunchtime Anna set off to look for her. Though her eldest child might have womanly curves, she was still a child. Anna found the half-filled pail, but no sign of her daughter.
In a car heading out of town, Becky smoothed her new dress. She felt the driver’s eyes on her body and smiled. She could handle him, just like the boys in school.
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Sending warmest congratulations to Rochelle on having her second book accepted and to Claire Fuller whose debut novel ‘Our Endless Numbered Days’ has received some great reviews. I am full of admiration for them both, it is lovely to share their company and their well deserved success, they have set the bar very high for us lesser mortals…
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More than one restless young person has left town in such a dubious way… hopefully Becky uses her independence and guile to make her life better, not worse!
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I hope so too. Thanks for reading Dawn 🙂
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Oh, trouble ahead? There’s a lot going on in this A mother with too much on her plate and not enough in her belly, a restless daughter with a child’s mind and a woman’s body. Well done. Glad you made it to the FF playground.
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Thank you for reading, I think there is trouble ahead and not sure if she will be able to cope…
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I’m afraid the thorny path she’s chosen will have more pricks than the blackberry bushes.
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You are so right! Thanks for reading
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I’m a bit worried for Becky, I think she might have bitten off more than she can chew – nice story. And thank you for the congratulations!
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And I think you’re right Claire, thanks for reading
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Dear Dee,
I fear that Becky might not be able to handle this driver. You’ve packed a lot of story into your hundred words.
Thank you for your kudos. It’s a step in the right direction. 😉 Lesser mortals? Perish the thought.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
It’s funny but the photo prompt came up not long after I read about a schoolgirl who ran away with her teacher, when they were found she said she was fed up of being the eldest child and having to ‘do stuff at home all the time ‘ and wanted an adventure!!
Thank you for your kind comments, it’s always good to hear from you,
Best wishes
Dee
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Oh my gawd! I hope he is as harmless as the boys in school. Somehow I doubt it. Yikes! Great 100 words Dee. You spun a lot of emotion (at least in me) with them.
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Thanks Dawn, I think she’s heading for trouble 😢
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Me too!
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Why do I think this is all going to end very badly? I hope it doesn’t nevertheless. Nice one Dee.
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Oh I think it will, thanks for reading Sandra
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Great use of the meager word allocation, Tay.
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Thank you Tay, good to hear from you
Dee
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uh-oh, becky didn’t know what she was getting into.
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She certainly didn’t. Thanks for reading 😊
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Oh dear…Lock up your daughters. Nicely done.
Leaves a stain as strong as that blackberry juice.
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Yes, I fear it was a very bad move. Lovely comment, thank you.
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He may be a tad more experienced, or devious than the boys in school. As a father, I’m nervous just thinking about it.
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With good reason too. Things will not end well I fear. Thanks for reading g Russ 😊
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story of many a girl and dreams often turn sour
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Yes that’s true, though she did behave quite badly. Thanks for reading.
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Dear Dee, I know how she must have felt when she was the only one who had to pick berries. I think she will soon be wishing she had kept to picking them – new dress or not! Good story
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Dear Nan, I think you’re right. It’s not always easy being the eldest, especially in a large family. Thank you for reading, always good to hear from you.
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Dear Dee,
This was a marvelous change up on the tired ‘girl disappears while picking raspberries’ storyline. I loved her command of the situation and had the feeling that the world was her oyster and God help anyone that got in her way. Great story and a memorable character.
Aloha,
Doug
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Dear Doug
Thank you for your kind comments. I still not sure if she has made a terrible mistake, or whether she will get away with it. She certainly doesn’t intend to pick any more blackberries that’s for sure!
Best wishes
Dee
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