We have sun today, it makes me think Spring can’t be far away and the daffodils in the garden obviously think so too.
Thanks for the photo this week go to Al Forbes – love the old cars – and a huge thank you to our FBM Rochelle for just being there. She has also been on the radio, you can catch her interview here
Copyright Al Forbes
Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 100
Moving Away
Stella keeps her head down, conscious of the cut above her left eye. Though her cell phone has remained silent, she senses Robert is nearby; he doesn’t like to be disobeyed. ‘Honey, I’m sorry, it was an accident…’
Years of abuse made her compliant, silent, invisible. Today, on the anniversary of her marriage, something snaps. Drawing out what little money she has managed to squirrel away, she is on a bus heading north.
Feeling safe, she sleeps. The loud blast from a horn wakes her. Robert is driving alongside pointing a gun, mouthing silent obscenities, totally oblivious of the truck.
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Yay for the truck! Well, Dee, you certainly had me 100%. That can only mean you wrote a great story. Well done.
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Thanks Carolyn, had to rework this to get the ending I wanted, pleased it worked 🙂
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The ending was magic! 😀
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How awful! I feel for the poor woman. Nicely done Dee.
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Thanks Sandra, there have been some awful stories in the press recently, I wanted one of these poor women to have a happier ending.
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Oh, so many emotions!!! From yay to nay back to yay, you had me cheering along the way.
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Thank you Loré, pleased you liked it. Can’t imagine what it must be like to live in such a relationship. At least this one had a happier ending than most.😊
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Dear Dee,
I hope this means the truck mowed the bastard down. I felt for her. Compliments to your stellar writing.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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PS Thank you for the link to the interview. 😀
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My pleasure, enjoyed it 😊
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Dear Rochelle
Yes, the truck sorted him out!
Thank you for your kind words, mean a lot coming from you.
Best wishes
Dee
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Oh no! What a cliffhanger. I’m hoping he went splat.
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He certainly did go splat. A well deserved ending. Thanks for reading 😊
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You sure packed a whole lot into 100 words here, Dee.
I was on the edge of my parrot throughout.
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Hope you kept your balance … Thanks for reading and pleased you like it 🐘
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Loved that last line. In fact liked the whole story
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Thank you Michael, much appreciated 🙂
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This was so well done! I have to agree with the comment above… yay to nay to yay!
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Aw thank you Dale 🙂
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You just have to cheer the tuck at the end. Like the way you did this, first she loses, she wins, she loses, she wins, and we don’t know how it’s going to pan out until the very end.
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Yes, the truck did a good job! Thanks for the very kind comment, pleased you liked it.
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I hope he rode a bike so the truck driver was unharmed… 🙂
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That was a consideration. I work with heavy trucks and know how an accident affects drivers – a little poetic licence 😀
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A satisfactory ending to a tragic tale. Excellent.
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Thank you Keith, pleased you liked it.
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Yay for the truck. What a rollercoaster ride for emotions.
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Thank you GAH and yes, yay for the truck!
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Sounds like it was time for her to get some luck. Great how you led us into her fear and then turned it around again
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Thanks Jen, pleased you liked it. It was definitely time for her to leave.
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What a beautifully times truck, and well-crafted surprise ending.
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A heavy truck seemed the best option for him… thanks for reading
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Sounds like he’s headed for a bad collision with a good truck!
This was a sad story, but very well told.
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Thank you Jan, very sad topic and unfortunately the press has been full of such stories lately.
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Oops, totally oblivious to the truck! Nice ending!
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Thank you 🙂
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Well done, Dee. We all love it when the bad guy get his.
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Yes Russ, he had to have a nasty ending… shame about the truck driver though
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Very vivid. Sadly they don’t all get just desserts. And Daffodils always = spring. 😀
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True, but they can do in fiction at least. Daffodils = spring, most definitely 🙂
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Hope he had some life insurance.
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Thanks Dawn, that would be the icing on her cake…
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Shocking good ending … loved this story.
Isadora 😎
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Thanks you Isadora
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Wonderful! I can see it all, playing out before me. Great way to finish.
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Thanks Margaret, it was a bit gruesome, but I wanted him to get his just desserts
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