Greek mythology has always been of great interest, I love the way the stories that have been handed down through the generations, are part myth, part magic and part history. The photo this week, courtesy of Al Forbes was always going to inspire one Greek tragedy or another. I decided to take a slightly different view, but I think I have managed to get some of the attributes of Hermes into my effort this week. So, a fanfare for the goddess of Friday Fictioneers Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, as she summons us all once more to the podium.
Fleeing the Scene
Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 100
Waking from a deep sleep I stretch feline-like
And then relax into the deep comforting mattress
Unbidden the memory returns.
The words cut deep, wounding us both,
Hateful bile spilled out of our mouths as we paced the room,
I cursed you for taking my love and trampling it underfoot,
For cheating and betraying me.
You grabbed my arms and roughly twisted one behind me
Trying to force me down onto the floor,
I felt excitement first then fury, that sheer strength could overcome me
Where words had failed
Shaken by your intentions you ran, fleeing the scene
And me
I’ve just found out that this is my 200th post and I have to admit I’m rather chuffed to have got this far.
Excellent story, and congratulations on the 200
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Thanks Al. Thanks too for the great photo, be over to read yours later
Dee
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I haven’t posted it yet, although I have gone for a more comedic one this time 😉 I hope to have it up in an hour or so 🙂
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That’s quite intense, darling — I was literally on the edge of my seat reading every word.
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Thank you my love, that is praise indeed. 🙂
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Congratulations on having 200 posts! WOULD that I could do it like you, but writing is sort of a necessary hobby of mine. Anyway, I like the poetic way the story is told and what’s happening . Truly good!
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Thank you so much Kent, pleased you like the post this week. Look forward as usual to reading your story.
Dee
🙂
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Wow, great tension builder 🙂
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Thank you Helen,
Dee
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congrats on your 200th post 🙂 really liked this.a gripping story. and i love greek mythology as well
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Thank you kz
I’m pleased you liked the story, Greek mythology is fascinating 🙂
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Your story read like a string of Haiku. Very poetic, gripping and ultimately ugly. Relationships can be that way…
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Yes they certainly can…
I’ll have to look more closely at Haiku, I’ve never been really sure what it is, being perfectly honest.
Thanks for reading
Dee
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Good riddance, I say.
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I would have to agree 🙂
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Wow! Very gripping, such a lot in a few words. And well done for 200 posts.
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Hi Sandra, thank you.
I started my blog in a half hearted fashion, not really sure what I was doing or what I wanted to achieve.
I have to say I have thoroughly enjoyed the experience so far and met a lot of lovely people. I think my writing has improved and being part of FF has played a great part in that.
Dee
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I was terrified that he did something worse-but so glad he had the sense to leave!Human relationships specially involving the matters gf heart are so complex-a great read:-)
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Thank you for reading.
Yes, human relationships are very complex and provide writers with a lot of material.
I’m pleased that you like it.
Dee
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“:-)
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Dear Dee,
Intense scene. You had me there in the moment. I’m still breathing hard. I will have to say that the bile coming from their mouths conjured up a very different image until I read the following line.
Mazel tov on the 200 milestone. I have a way t go before I catch you and then you’ll be pushing 300.
Shalom.
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
I got quite carried away with this one and wrote loads, which meant lots of editing to get it to fit the challenge.
I’m pleased that you liked it, something different for me.
That’s the first time I have seen mazel tov written down, I’ve heard it lots of times, what is the correct meaning?
When I started my blog I was very nervous and kept it private for a while (lack of confidence I think at the time) then took the plunge and have really enjoyed the journey.
Take care
Dee
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Dear Dee,
Actually, my last two have been departures for me in some respects. Glad you challenged yourself. It worked. I used to wonder what people meant about the process being more exciting than the destination. Now I understand.
Mazel Tov… means something like “Good fortune” and is commonly used as Congratulations.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
I haven’t seen your most recent one yet, will be visiting later. I just love the way you manage to weave history into your stories – I know it’s one of your passions – but it gives them all extra substance.
It is good to leave your comfort zone occasionally and walk a different road.
Thank you for the explanation – lovely words.
Take care
Dee
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Dear Dee,
This poem was a smooth and powerful, somber and reflective piece of work that still is resonating in my mind. Something deep and powerful stirred within me as I read it and I want you to know that this one will linger in my memory for a long, long time.
Aloha,
Doug
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Dear Doug
I thank you for your very kind comments, they mean a great deal. I am a huge fan of your writing and am pleased to think you have found something to appreciate in mine.
Take care
Dee
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Gee, that was a rather unpleasant memory. Hopefully, it wil be a distant one soon. A well written scene, Dee.
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It was and I’m sure it will be.
Sometimes it’s good to get out of your writing comfort zone and I’m pleased you liked it.
Take care
Dee
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I think this qualifies as a prose poem, and a very powerful one, too!
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Thank you Jan, and for reading.
Until recently I gave poetry a wide berth, but have enjoyed writing a few pieces, in this style – not too good at rhyming poetry
Dee
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Hi Dee,
Congrats on your 200th post. You are indeed prolific. Lots of great conflict carries this story it’s very well written. Ron
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Hi Ron
Thank you.
WordPress flagged it up I really couldn’t have said how many I had done, the time has gone quickly. I only wish I had learned how to set up
all the widgets when I started out.
I’m pleased you liked this effort.
Take care
Dee
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An entire story, in 100 words. Of course, back-story is in the background, but we don’t need scene-setting, just the scene itself. Well done.
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Thank you so much, pleased you liked it.
Dee
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Potent piece of writing, great depiction of personal violence.
Well done.
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Thank you Elephant, your comments are always appreciated 🙂
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Dee, this was an intensely power piece. You had my sitting on the edge all the way through. Another favorite from this week’s prompt for me.
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Thank you very much for your kind comments, lovely to hear from you.
Dee
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So powerful
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Thank you for reading 🙂
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An intense work, and I was particularly taken by this line: “I felt excitement first then fury, that sheer strength could overcome me” This piece was very good throughout.
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Thank you so much, so pleased you liked it 🙂
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Dee, some very powerful writing this week! The imagery really pops, the scene compelling and intense. “I felt excitement first, then flury…” So relatable: that mix of emotions when adrenaline is in play. Well done!
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Thank you, I’m so pleased you liked it.
Thanks for reading
🙂
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Dee, this piece was too real and heart-breaking. My only solace is that it often ends much worse… great writing and congrats on the 200…
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Hi Bjorn
Yes you are right, too often scenes like this end in tragedy.
Thanks for your comments, they are much appreciated.
Dee
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