Sweet Revenge

I missed Friday Fictioneers last week. I couldn’t make the deadline and I really missed reading everyone else’s stories. I am back this week in time to submit a story, but then I’m travelling to France for a few days. I will catch up when I get back.  Thanks to Rochelle for never missing a beat, what would we do without her? Thanks to Kent Bonham for the photo this week, I’ve been lucky enough to have seen a lot of Gaudi’s work both in Barcelona and in Palma – totally unforgettable.


Genre: Fiction

Word Count: 100


I stand silently in the shadows, waiting.

A taxi pulls up and a man alights. I quickly cross the road and as he opens the door I slip in behind him, heart pounding. He walks on down the hallway without looking back.

I scan the names on the mailboxes. Elena Avila – Penthouse. My former friend has come a long way indeed.

I slide the small, instantly recognisable gold box inside. It’s been resealed; she will see the expensive chocolates nothing else. She has always taken other people’s things, this time it’s my husband.

I’ve decided she can’t have him.



41 thoughts on “Sweet Revenge

  1. Oooh, I think Elena is going to be in for a nasty shock. I hope she shares the chocolates with that no-good wandering husband. I also hope that the chocolates have been handmade using Chocolate Laxettes triple strength 🙂


  2. I wish my being behind on reading were from going to France for a few days rather than criss-crossing the eastern US in the van. 🙂 Have fun and thanks for the enjoyable story (although not so much for the cheating couple, I think.)



    • Thank you Janet.
      I enjoyed my short trip to France, only three days but seemed a lot longer.
      Are you still travelling?
      Going to catch up on my reading now
      Take care


    • Yes I must admit I was a bit stuck when I first saw the beautiful photo.
      After several attempts at stories inside the building that were far too long, I decided that my narrator would just hide in shadows outside, watching and waiting.
      Thank you for reading


  3. Nice little tale of revenge. Fair warning to stay away from your husband and stay away from your chocolates too! 🙂 I hope you have a wonderful trip to France.


    • Dear Rochelle
      Shame really to use chocolates as the carrier for this dark deed, as I am rather partial to them myself. But I think they would do the job perfectly.
      Thank you for reading
      Take care


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