I missed last week’s Friday Fictioneers; for friends and followers, my previous post explains what happened. All is still not well but this is not the place…
The lovely photo prompt this week, courtesy of Managua Gunn should provoke some great stories from the Fictioneers. Thanks to Rochelle as usual for continuing to spur us into action.
Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 100
Role Reversal
She stands erect, eyes forward never moving, as we watch her from the corner of the square.
Her long blonde hair is tied back under her helmet, her uniform immaculate as always. I want to touch her, but cannot.
Occasionally she will come to attention, march to the post across the courtyard, turn and march back, but I haven’t time to wait.
Last night she wasn’t immaculate as she abandoned herself to desire. Passion spent, we slept entwined, waking early for her to take up her post.
We walk away. I have to get the children to school.
this really made me smile, there’s a lot of sweetness in it 🙂
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Thank you kz, glad I made you smile 🙂
Dee
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That’s a different perspective on the photo – loved it. Hope your husband is feeling better now, Dee.
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Thanks Sandra, this just seemed to pop into my head!
My husband came home this evening, he is still quite weak but getting better. Thanks for your good wishes
Dee
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I like how varied all the stories are. Nice one!
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Thanks for reading Hannah, glad you liked it
Dee
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A very frustrating moment.
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Certainly was.
Thanks for reading
Dee
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Dee, I enjoyed this. It reminded me of a post I did last week that you might enjoy as well: http://sustainabilitea.wordpress.com/2013/06/13/the-art-of-the-unexpected-ending/. Good job.
Hope everything is well or, if not, getting better.
janet
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Glad you liked it Janet, it almost wrote itself!
I’ll take a look at your post, sounds very interesting.
My husband is home now, still weak but getting better thankfully.
Dee
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The kind that almost write themselves are the best kind, aren’t they, especially when you don’t have lots of time to spend on writing. Glad your husband is doing better and I pray he recovers quickly.
janet
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Yes they are somehow.
Thank you so much for your prayers Janet, I have been overwhelmed by the caring thoughts I’ve received during this time. The kindness of people has been humbling.
Dee
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Well now this is a well written and original take on the prompt! Well done! 😀
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Thank you kindly, glad you enjoyed it
Dee
🙂
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Dee, you did it great! So much in there and so short a read, too! That’s how it’s done! YES!!! Thanks for this!
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Dear Kent
Thank you for your lovely comments, so pleased that you liked the story.
Looking forward to catching up with yours and the others later.
Take care
Dee
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I’ll be waitin’!
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The jobs women undertake…
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Well said!
Thanks for reading
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Oh yes.. distance of the uniform. Love that take
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Thank you Bjorn, something different.
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Dear Dee,
All I can add to other comments is my own enjoyment. I hope things continue to get better for you and your husband.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
I am pleased that you enjoyed this.
Thank you for reading and for your good wishes, they are much appreciated.
Take care
Dee
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I really enjoyed this Dee. Perspective is everything isn’t it. Many changes today, we have to rethink how we view so many things don’t we. Well written!
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Glad you liked it Penny, our world is changing every day and we have to rethink our views; nothing stays the same for long.
Dee
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This is a lovely story!
I’m sorry to hear about your husband’s illness. I know from very painful experience how devastating an infection can be — as well as the antibiotics that are the “cure.” Godspeed his recovery. And bless you for being such a good caregiver!
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Thank you for reading Jan and for your good wishes and kind comments, they are much appreciated.
Dee
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Your title says it all–well done.
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Thanks for reading, so pleased that you liked my offering.
Dee
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My mind went to infidelity. Certainly a thought provoking piece. Thank you for sharing.
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You’re welcome, glad you liked it
Dee
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Perfect.. and the title is apt
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Thank you for reading.
Dee
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I LOVED this…
Kudos for coming out with a different perspective 🙂
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Thank you so much, glad you liked the different view.
Dee
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Relationships are always so complicated, and we live many lives; wear many uniforms. This was very well written and you conveyed the narrator’s longing very well.
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They are complicated and the uniforms we wear are different and varied.
Thank you for reading and for your kind comment.
Dee
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What a lovely idea. I must be tough to be married to one of these guards. And how exciting to steal away for a moment of bliss. I really enjoyed this.
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Glad you liked it and thanks for reading
Dee
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Very nice fleshing out of the guard’s personal life.
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Thank you, pleased that you liked it
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Great contrast between the disciplined, serious lady of the day and passionate one of the night.
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Thank you David.
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I agree with David’s comment. She was a stone statue at work and a fiery, passionate lover at home. Great take on the prompt.
Sending up prayers for you and yours.
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Thank you Russell, I think your description is spot on!
Thank you also for your kind words, they are really appreciated. My husband is feeling better but not back to his usual self yet.
Dee
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At the end of her shift she can go home. And their desire be rekindled.
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Oh, I like that idea….
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Yeah, me too. Wink, wink.
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I didn’t even spot she was a ‘she’ when I saw the picture, or I might have written a different story. You’ve done a great job here, and there are a lot of women in the services, but you don’t often see a tale from that perspective. I really liked this 🙂
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Thank you Trudy.
To tell the truth I decided to write as if the soldier was a woman; then when I was ready to post I noticed the hair, thought it looked a bit strange for a man.
Glad you liked it
Dee
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Dear Dee,
This was a beautiful story and a quiet, sweet and sensual testament to the power of love.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thank you Doug, it’s good to hear from you.
Glad you liked it
Dee
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