My story is rather bleak as that is how most things have seemed to me this week, though I have tried for a hopeful ending.
Thanks go as usual to Rochelle for continuing to host Friday Fictioneers. I must admit to slight envy when I read in her post that she will be meeting up with some Fictioneers this weekend, it must be so good to meet up in person with the people whose stories we read each week. I can dream…
Thanks also to Kent Bonham for the intriguing photograph this week.
Genre: Fiction
Word Count 100
Maggie’s Choice
Maggie walked carefully down the dimly lit back street. Her small bag contained the items she was told she would need, afterwards. The house in the back street was her only option, no-one must ever find out about ‘It.’
The bright room smelled strongly of antiseptic; the strange array of equipment on the starched white cloth, looked alien and frightening. Though her body had healed after the violent assault, the nightmare continued. Tom still could not bring himself to touch her and now, this.
She endured the pain and, with her body cleansed, at last felt ready to move on.
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Powerful stuff, I felt her despair. Great job 🙂
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Thank you Helen 🙂
Fell behind this week, have lots of catching up to do 🙂
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How awful, darling. Such a horrible, lonely place to be in. You captured it wonderfully — I hope that by doing so you purged whatever bleakness you may have been feeling.
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Very pleased you thought so x
Feeling better, it’s just been one of those weeks that started in a mad frenzy of meetings and faded into a mound of paperwork! Need to catch up on my ff reading now.
Enjoy your weekend, wherever you are x
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Strong stuff this week Dee! Well done.
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I was in a bit of a bleak mood when I wrote this, feel better now thank goodness.
Thanks as always for reading and commenting Sandra. Have a great weekend x
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Grim story but very real. Does she stay with Tom?
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Thank you!
I’m not sure – their relationship has been thrown into chaos and her ‘secret’ is bound to cause huge problems…on the other hand Tom should be more supportive …
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It is, as you say, very bleak but it’s incredibly powerful.
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Thank you so much 🙂
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It looks like Maggie had no choice. Tom could do with a bit of re-educating.
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No she didn’t. You’re right about Tom, and I hope he gets it.
Thank you for reading, enjoy your weekend.
Dee
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Wow, the loneliness in this is heartbreaking.
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Thank you Dawn 🙂
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It is bleak, but I did feel hope at the end. I got a sense of isolation and loneliness. Good choice for the prompt, Dee.
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Glad you the glimmer of hope came across, thanks for reading 🙂
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Dear Dee,
Your story packed a wallop and carried a lot of emotion. Well done. Hope you’re feeling better.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
Glad the emotion came through. Feeling better now, just had a very hectic couple of weeks and somehow the melancholy side of me takes over!
Hope you enjoyed your weekend ‘meet up’ great to meet other Fictioneers.
Take care
Dee
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The noir element here is impeccable. Loved it. Congratulations.
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Thank you very much, pleased you liked it 🙂
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Bleak, as you had warned us readers. So well-crafted to describe the bleakness, and I was chilled when she referred to ‘It.’ But a touch of hope at the end, and hopefully Tom will come around.
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Glad you saw the ‘hope’ wasn’t sure it would come through.
I’m not sure about Tom, perhaps I’ll revisit them at some point.
Thanks for reading
🙂
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Oh,poor woman!If I were her I would rather leave Tom-he is not a real man if he is not sensitive to her emotional upheaval!Powerful writing here:-)
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I think Tom had huge problems trying to come to terms with what happened to Maggie, hopefully things will get better.
Thank you for reading
Dee
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Yes,it’s possible-I hope so too:-)
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Nice to be reading your stories again, Dee, even though this one is bleak. You portrayed that well, but I hope that the hope in the story will blossom. I also hope you’re getting out from under. 🙂
janet
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Thank you Janet. I am feeling much better, sometimes the workload gets to me and it shouldn’t, but I get over it.
It’s good up hear from you, I have missed your stories, although loved hearing about your travels .
Do take care
Dee
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This is a powerfully complex story. Brutal actions have consequences and choices must be made. This is one strong woman, at least if you ask me.
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Thank you so much. She is trying to be strong I guess.
Thank you for reading
Dee
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Dee, this is so real in the telling. I knew a woman that this happened to. Her husband was weak and left her. I hope her husband is strong enough to love her through the pain.
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Thank you Lynda. It must be a terrible thing to go through such an ordeal and then lose the love and support of the one closest to you just when you need it most.
Thanks for reading
Dee
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